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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Certain
people
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 around the globe opine that it is better to spend
money
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 on building new railway lines for inter-city speed trains while others argue
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 it a waste of
money
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 which should rather be used to better the current forms of transportation used by the public. Personally, I believe spending
money
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 on manufacturing new train
stations
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 helps decongest the other forms of transportation. One plus point of spending
money
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 on the construction of train
stations
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 is that it works serves as a way of reducing
congestion
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 in the other
transport
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 sectors. Traffic
congestion
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 is a global problem today because
people
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 do not have other alternative means of
transport
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 that they could
use
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.
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, building
such
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stations
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 presents them with more options to
use
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thus
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 reducing the
congestion
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 in the long run. Take,
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, in a survey conducted on the reasons for traffic
congestion
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 on some Zambian roads, it was determined that
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 was due to a lack of alternative means of transportation for
people
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 to
use
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thus
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 the
congestion
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.
Therefore
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, it is only prudent that
money
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 should be spent on the construction of railway lines for speed trains.
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 represents my opinion on
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 matter.
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, others oppose the preceding thought because they believe that the existing means of
transport
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 are already more effective than the trains.
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, the current forms of
transport
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 are very reliable no wonder
people
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 opted for them in the
first
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 place.
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, rather than
use
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 the
money
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 on something new, it is better to spend it on ensuring that the roads ,
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, are safer so that
people
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 can continue enjoying themselves as before.
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, rather than forsaking the rehabilitation of roads that offers both shorter and longer routes, it is prudent to improve these as they are more commonly used.
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 in itself is reason enough for certain individuals to decide on taking
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 route. By way of conclusion, I reaffirm my stance that spending more
money
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 on constructing new railway
stations
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 as an alternative to the existing public
transport
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 system, serves as a way of decongesting them.
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 will be better understood in the coming days.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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