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Some people feel that boarding schools ( where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number reasons.

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While
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 boarding
schools
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 are traditionally
educational
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an educational
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 option, especially in
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the United
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 Kingdom (UK), India, China, and parts of Africa. There are arguments on both sides of
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 very topical debate, and I will discuss them now. On the one
hand
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 those who support
of
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apply
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boarding
schools
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 cite
children
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 acquire plenty of
benefit
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benefits
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. These range from communication skills,
creativity
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to creativity
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, and intellectual abilities. For example,
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 often
have
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 quite competent teachers
are
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who are
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 experts in their field.
In
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addition
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 pupils will be able to get
good
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a good
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 education, which may give them pretty good career opportunities
afterward
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.
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,
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 is
also
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 known that many
children
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 may
can
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find friends for a lifetime, and they will stay in contact with each other.
By contrast
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, opponents of view point out that boarding
schools
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 often have pretty high tuition fees. They
also
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 say that paying
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 sum of money will never be possible for a middle-class family.
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, only quite privileged
children
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 from wealthy families might have the opportunity to attend those
schools
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.
Furthermore
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,
this
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 is depending on the character of pupils, boarding
schools
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 might not be the right way to go.
It is clear that
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 some
children
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 are not ready to leave their parents behind at a quite young age. And nurturers should consider
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whether their
children
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 have the characteristics and the mental strengths for
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.
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, it would appear that the decision to send the
children
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 to
the
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boarding
schools
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 should be based on family circumstances and child interest, rather than on
general
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the general
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 view that it is
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an
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excellent option for
children
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.
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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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