Nowadays, most people try to balance between work and other part of lives. Unfortunately, not many achieve this balance. What are the problems of this? Suggest some solutions to solve the problem?

Most
people
in
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these day
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this day
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try to make an equilibrium on their
work
and personal lives. Sadly, not all
of
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people
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the people
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can make
this
happen. Some
people
still find it difficult to make a boundary between
work
and personal lives. One of the
reason
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some
people
couldn't reach the equilibrium is they don't make a clear boundary.
The
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example of the boundaries is
people
need to
strict
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to
work
hour
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hours
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. When it’s
time
to
work
,
people
need to start to
work
and stopped when
its
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it's
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already
time
to stop.
This
looks easy to do, but in
fact
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some
people
can’t do it because of the pressure from their boss or simply the feel of guilty seeing others person in team
remain
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to
work
.
However
,
people
need to discipline with
this
work
hour
by not using it for personal usage. If it’s really necessary to do something
at
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work
hour
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hours
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,
people
better take a holiday to do their own business. The
work
circumstance
also
needs to be built to understand that every project needs to be done in the
work
hour
. Another reason is bad management
time
in daily life. Many
people
who can’t balance their
work
and personal life seem don’t have
daily
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projection or don’t discipline with that.
Make
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a daily projections activity is necessary to discipline
their self
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themself
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. By making the projections,
people
already
breakdown
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break down
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their activity based on the
time
they need to
spent
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in a day.
Its
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It
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also
decrease the possibility of
skip
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skipping
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some important activity in a day. Good management times will lead
people
to the equilibrium of
work
and personal lives.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

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  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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  • Finally
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