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Some experts say for road safety cyclists should pass a test before being allowed on public roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Experts in traffic think that cyclists should be examined in order to ride
safety
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. To that
extent
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 I am partly in disagreement
due
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 the following reasons.
First
 of all, we should think about the fact that we are day by day improving the use of public transport and we
also
 applause who choose environmental friendly transport like bicycles. In fact, in some famous metropolises
such
 as London, Amsterdam or Rome there are bicycles to be rented to discover the city in a healthy way. Nowadays the kilometres of bicycle lanes compound the landscape of these forefront cities and even
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 citizens prefer to leave at home their own cars and move on two wheels. For
this
 reason, I am in total disagreement with that advice.
Secondly
, I think that behind
this
 advice there is a big business hidden.
This
 business involves driving schools and the governments. The
first
 ones because they earn with each driving course and
also
, the
second
 ones with the fees and taxes to certify the licences.
Nevertheless
, I am aware that, not all citizens are able to ride correctly a bicycle and they could be potentially dangerous to pedestrians and car drivers.
Besides
 the fact that drunk bicyclists could cause accidents. For
this
 reason, I am partly in agreement to that extent. In my opinion, bicyclists should pass an exam in order to ride properly if they have had a recent history of accidents or if they have problems with alcohol, drugs or some substance that could alter their consciousness.
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