People today can use the internet to learn about lives and cultures in other countries, so it is not necessary to travel anymore. Do you agree?

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The internet is one of the most important sources of human knowledge; nowadays there are people who prefer being comfortable at home by seeing the world through a screen. In my

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I do not agree,

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is a great motivation to interact with other people.

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the other hand, I have a variety of reasons why I think

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is a good motivation.

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allows us to explore new climates and cultures.

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, When we travel we learn more about their places (How they live), people and how their cultures are. Unlike it's not the same when we

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it through a screen.

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, we can see in more depth

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their festivities are like,

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as "Día de

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Muertos." On the Day of the

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we can observe how friends and family gather to pray to the deceased, we can

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observe how they make their famous Bread called "El Pan Del Muerto.

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we can see how they make their famous Calaveras (Skulls) that are famous all around the world.

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, seeing it through a screen is not the same as enjoying it in person. In conclusion, the internet is incredible and wonderful but it does not compare to the reality and the experience of living it in person.

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, if you want to know the world more deeply and learn more about it, I would recommend exploring it and enjoying it in person in my

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

242 words

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People today can use the internet to learn about lives and cultures in other countries, so it is not necessary to travel anymore. Do you agree?

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Today more and more people want things instanly (eg. goods , services, news). Why is this? Is this a positive or negative development?

Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. To what extent do you agree or disaagree with this statement?

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business, and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Small shops in towns and villages are closing and are being replaced by big stores. Do you think it is a good or a bad trend? Explain your opinion.