People today can use the internet to learn about lives and cultures in other countries, so it is not necessary to travel anymore. Do you agree?

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The internet is one of the most important sources of human knowledge; nowadays there are people who prefer being comfortable at home by seeing the world through a screen. In my

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I do not agree,

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is a great motivation to interact with other people.

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the other hand, I have a variety of reasons why I think

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is a good motivation.

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allows us to explore new climates and cultures.

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, When we travel we learn more about their places (How they live), people and how their cultures are. Unlike it's not the same when we

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it through a screen.

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, we can see in more depth

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their festivities are like,

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as "Día de

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Muertos." On the Day of the

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we can observe how friends and family gather to pray to the deceased, we can

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observe how they make their famous Bread called "El Pan Del Muerto.

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we can see how they make their famous Calaveras (Skulls) that are famous all around the world.

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, seeing it through a screen is not the same as enjoying it in person. In conclusion, the internet is incredible and wonderful but it does not compare to the reality and the experience of living it in person.

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, if you want to know the world more deeply and learn more about it, I would recommend exploring it and enjoying it in person in my

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People today can use the internet to learn about lives and cultures in other countries, so it is not necessary to travel anymore. Do you agree?

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

The leaders or directors of organizations are often older people. But some people say that young people can also be a leader. Do you agree or disagree?

Write a letter to a friend who will come to your country to work for 6 months. In your letter, you should: •recommend a city •suggest a few jobs that your friend could do •give some opinions about making friends with the locals.

Some Universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

globalization is positive for economics, but it’s negative side should not be ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?