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The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Excessive traffic and increasing pollution are affecting every major city in the globe. To lessen
such
 problems, some people say that governments should raise the price of fuel
such
 as petrol and diesel. lt may help to some extent, but I disagree that it is the best solution to solve the problem of the environment.
To begin
 with, the number of
cars
 in a country directly depends on the proportion of the population, affluent enough to own
cars
.
As a result
,
raises
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 in
gas
 prices could invoke hard feelings among
this
 segment of people, but would not drastically change their behaviour in using
cars
. Even if the number of
cars
 on
road
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 is reduced
due to
 higher
gas
 costs,
this
 is not the best way to solve traffic problems.
Such
policy
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 would hurt the auto industry, place higher costs on current and prospective car owners, and be detrimental to the economy of a nation.
ln
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 the long run, the final way out could be the construction of better roads and more effective use of available public transport facilities.
Secondly
, there is evidence that waste
gas
 from
cars
 is not the leading cause of air pollution. The culprit
maybe
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 the discharge of polluting substances into the atmosphere
due to
 the rapidly growing manufacturing industry.
As a result
,
reduction
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a reduction
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of
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 the number of
cars
 would not return us
a
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blue sky and fresh air. We could better handle
this
 problem if we could increase control over industrial waste discharge and adopt more environmentally friendly materials and production equipment.
Finally
, other measures like the application of cheaper and cleaner energy resources could
also
 be a better solution.
For example
, we now have the ability to make cell-powered or even solar-powered
cars
.
Such
 energy is completely clean and plentiful. Summing up, it is not the best way to control traffic and pollution
by
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increasing
the
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gas
 prices because
such
 action will hurt consumers and the economy without achieving what it is aimed for. Measures
such
 as the construction of better transport facilities and the development of new energy resources could be more effective solutions.
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