In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays many

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use marketing

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to sell their

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on the

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advertising

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society.

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show

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that the new

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iPhone

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people

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to have new spending like priority

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the economy.

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products

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brands like Coca-Cola change the

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but the

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the same.

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the same, with a negative

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the mind of

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who watch that.

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there are some who think that business is better when is different and creative selling

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. In conclusion, marketing could influence in different ways

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the

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who watch that, either negatively or positively. In my

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believe when brands

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products

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like new have a negative effect in the society.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

240 words

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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give you own opinion.

Some people believe that countries should produce the food to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it should be stopped. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people claim that museums and art galleries are not needed today because everyone can see historical objects or art works by computer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?