In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays many
company
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use marketing
trying
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to sell their
products
like new
for
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ones for
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different
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a different
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reason
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reasons
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either with
positive
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a positive
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or negative
impact
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on the
people
. In my opinion, I believe
this
type of
advertisment
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advertising
could have a negative
impact
.
Firstly
, It can be seen a lot of
people
want to keep updated with cutting edge technology with a negative
impact
in
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society.
For instance
, every year Apple in their
advertisment
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advertisement
show
that the new
Iphone
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iPhone
have new features and
this
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people
to have new spending like priority
speceally
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specially
especially
on
younths
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youths
. In
adittion
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addition
, the population increase the desire for material things.
Nevertheless
, other
people
think that could
be benefit
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the economy.
Secondly
, there are those who feel that
sell
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products
like new
is
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a
deceive
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.
For example
,
usually
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,usually
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brands like Coca-Cola change the
appereance
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appearance
of their
products
but the
products
always
is
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are
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the same.
Moreover
,
people
feel tired
about
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of
this
type of company because they
show
in
different
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a different
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type
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types
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of
advertisment
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advertisement
the same, with a negative
impact
in
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on
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the mind of
people
who watch that.
Although
there are some who think that business is better when is different and creative selling
products
like new than if they
show
the same
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advertisement
. In conclusion, marketing could influence in different ways
on
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the
people
who watch that, either negatively or positively. In my
opinion
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I agree with
who
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those who
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believe when brands
show
products
like new have a negative effect in the society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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