It is inevitable that as technology develops traditional cultures must be lost. Technology and tradition are incompatible – you cannot have both together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Technological development has been significantly changing the world

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over two previous decades. For years,

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development had been viewed as a positive phenomenon for the world, but recently people are taking a fresh look at it. It is argued that the

traditions

and

cultures

are being forgotten as

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result of it. It is noteworthy to bear in mind that each improvement has its own costs. I am completely in agreement with the above-said view. The following essay will overlook two means that

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technology can affect

cultures

.

Firstly

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of

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global

culture

has become plausible due to

this

development.

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, the new means of communication and increase of interpersonal interactions resulted in

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of different

cultures

.

Consequently

, the

next

generation will be brought up not only by the cultural beliefs of their parents but

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cultures

of their online peers which can cause a novel integral

culture

around the world with traits of all

traditions

.

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mean that the new one will be

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undesirable

culture

, the pure traditional

cultures

will not exist anymore.

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traditions

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have

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defects that have been kept over hundreds of years due to human's lack of knowledge and countries' isolation.

For instance

, marriage just after puberty is a traditional

culture

in some developing countries that are being banned after

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of healthcare and expansion of it in those countries by the technology.

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means that one of the fundamental aspects of families, which is marriage, is changing and can result in

subsequently

other changes in the way that they are living and raising their offspring as people

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more aware. To sum up, the evolution of traditional

cultures

has

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as the technology is improving. The creation of the global

culture

and solving the defects of some

traditions

are two consequences that are about to happen. I believe that these changes are inevitable and need to be guided in a way

that is

beneficial for humans.