It is inevitable that as technology develops traditional cultures must be lost. Technology and tradition are incompatible – you cannot have both together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Technological development has been significantly changing the world
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over two previous decades. For years,
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development had been viewed as a positive phenomenon for the world, but recently people are taking a fresh look at it. It is argued that the
traditions
and
cultures
are being forgotten as
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result of it. It is noteworthy to bear in mind that each improvement has its own costs. I am completely in agreement with the above-said view. The following essay will overlook two means that
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technology can affect
cultures
.
Firstly
,
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of
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global
culture
has become plausible due to
this
development.
For example
, the new means of communication and increase of interpersonal interactions resulted in
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of different
cultures
.
Consequently
, the
next
generation will be brought up not only by the cultural beliefs of their parents but
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cultures
of their online peers which can cause a novel integral
culture
around the world with traits of all
traditions
.
Although
it does not
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mean that the new one will be
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undesirable
culture
, the pure traditional
cultures
will not exist anymore.
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traditions
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have
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defects that have been kept over hundreds of years due to human's lack of knowledge and countries' isolation.
For instance
, marriage just after puberty is a traditional
culture
in some developing countries that are being banned after
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of healthcare and expansion of it in those countries by the technology.
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means that one of the fundamental aspects of families, which is marriage, is changing and can result in
subsequently
other changes in the way that they are living and raising their offspring as people
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more aware. To sum up, the evolution of traditional
cultures
has
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as the technology is improving. The creation of the global
culture
and solving the defects of some
traditions
are two consequences that are about to happen. I believe that these changes are inevitable and need to be guided in a way
that is
beneficial for humans.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • traditional cultures
  • incompatible
  • technological advancements
  • cultural preservation
  • historical heritage
  • globalization
  • hybridization
  • digital divide
  • cross-cultural interaction
  • economic incentives
  • generational perspectives
  • disruption
  • cultural identity
  • evolution of tradition
  • cultural resilience
  • heritage conservation
  • information technology
  • multiculturalism
  • cultural assimilation
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