Que: Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual people to address. We have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is to address it at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the view of the modern world, the environmental issue is notorious for humankind.
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problem not only affects individuals
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but
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a large number of
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countries
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around the world;
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, comprehensive actions are needed in order to reduce the undesirable effects. In
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essay, I strongly agree an international collaboration is important to preserve
mother nature
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. First and foremost, environmental issues which affect one country can in the same way influence other
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, in Indonesia, when Riau province in Sumatra Island experienced an immense bushfire in 2018, it produced massive smog which can harm other provinces and
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other
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as Singapore and Malaysia.
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,
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phenomenon injured the economic, social, and cultural activities of those
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, bushfires might develop inappropriate health issues for communities.
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, the carbon dioxide would lead to pneumonia, lung cancer, and other respiratory issues.
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, global warming is a form of environmental issue on a wider scale and might affect all nations around the world.
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, the indirect impact
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a greenhouse effect may lead to an elevation of sea level worldwide;
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, many small islands will
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sink in 2100,
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the Global Research Foundation of America.
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, a large number of people will lose their properties
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their
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,
this
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issue can lead to a catastrophic event in the future if multinational movements do not take important action
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as an emission agreement. In conclusion, all nations worldwide should have a sense of crisis to the environment and
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should not neglect mother nature. The international agreement will decrease the negative impact in the future, as long as the local government and communities have a sense of crisis as well.
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Ensure that your essay directly addresses the prompt by discussing the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement. Provide a clear stance and support it throughout the essay.
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