Some people argue that fashion items cost too much money. Others say that this is acceptable because fashion is an important part of life.

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Some
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believe that fashionable
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cost too much
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, others disagree with
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opinion and say that fashion is an important part of life. On one hand, trendy
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that are made of good materials cost a lot of
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for some
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. They are not ready to pay more
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that
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100 dollars on a regular t-shirt and it is understandable
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because every trend has a tendency to pass and after some time
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that were used to be trendy could be already out of the trend. If a person wants to keep up with trends he has to prepare a huge sum of
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and time to check all the new collections.
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, some
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can say that keeping up with trends is sometimes useful
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because it will raise your social status or fashionable
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will make you look richer than you actually are. A lot of
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try to wear only fashionable
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because they rely on the opinion of
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society too much. Sometimes they are scared that somebody will think that they are old-fashioned or out of trend. I believe that each person should decide by himself what to wear and how much
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to spend on fashionable
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. As for me, I wear only
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that look fancy in my eyes. I don’t care if they are fashionable or not. In conclusion, I would like to say that
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should make their own decisions in choosing
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because choosing an outfit is a very individual thing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic gap
  • impractical consumer behavior
  • overspending
  • accumulation of debt
  • materialism
  • superficial values
  • self-esteem
  • self-expression
  • psychological benefits
  • social benefits
  • quality of materials
  • craftsmanship
  • sustainable practices
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