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Health experts claim that walking is the best exercise. However, people are walking less on a daily basis. What has made it happen and how to deal with this? Write at least 250 words.

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Walking is without a doubt one of the best
exercise
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 in today's trend. In
this
 essay, I will examine the factors that contribute to that made
people
 are walking less on a daily basis and propose some solutions to them.
Basically
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 there are two factors that contribute toward less walking.
First
, many
people
 tend to drive
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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 or
car
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cars
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 rather than
to
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apply
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use public transportation. Lack of public transportation facilities had made
people
 accustomed to
have
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having
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 private means of
tranportations
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transportation
transportations
. Since housing
price
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prices
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 skyrocketed, Commuting from less expensive housing
area
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areas
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that is
further
 become the sole alternative for
people
.
Second
, there is
lack
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 of
sidewalks
. Living in
crowded
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a crowded
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 city with traffics should have
encourage
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people
 to prefer walking since it will be faster. But when the city provided
less
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sidewalks
,
people
 would be eager to walk.
This
 lack of facilities
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therefore
 become the norm that walking is a hassle. Despite the reasons given above, there are two ways to encourage
people
walking
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to walk
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 more.
First
, Provide better means of public transportation that interconnected from rural area to urban area. Changing stations or taking
bus
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the bus
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 means that
people
 will walk more.
Second
, Make
a better
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a better sidewalk
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sidewalks
 so
people
 experiences walking is better that
people
 will have
good
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a good
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 mindset to prefer walking
than
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to
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stay
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staying
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on
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in
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traffic
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a traffic
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 jam. In conclusion, walking is the best
ecercise
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exercise
 if we can make it our daily habit without hassle. We could focus on public
tranportaion
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transportation
 more and have better
sidewalks
 to provide
better
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a better
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 experience.
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