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countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world Do you think this is a positive or negarive development

#countries #people #products #world #negarive #development
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invidualist
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individualist
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 are being to purchase the same type of property which to need for life anywhere in the world its seems in
countries
orign
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origin
 independents and resemblance.In the forthcoming
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paragraph
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I put my own viewpoint about
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negative
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 or positive at
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 of
all
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 travelling was a must in the past for
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same
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 good property.As
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result
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people
 go
to
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ways
 to purchase which they did not
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 and
deversing
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deserving
 think.Many
people
disappered
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disappeared
 or died at
ways
. The rich families bought everything
in
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where they lived.
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remedy
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needed
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 for sicks. They near persons went
to
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 far
ways
. If they came on time they might
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otherwise
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died
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. Il my point of view I add with endurance
this
ways
. Nowadays
countries
 upgrade with any fields. As well as
rainwals
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railways
renewals
, roads and airline have been improving. Market and online economy have been developing. Products are made for imported in foreign
countries
 usually of high quality. Costumers do not waste time, energy, money to
ways
 and not justification
predestrian
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pedestrian
 travelling.
Instead
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people
 are able to expend money
for
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 high-end products.
Secondly
 exports and imports
contribution
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 for financial parts. At present within
countries
 appear rivalry
for
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take
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 out their product to
world
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the world
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 market. They search on
mainfuction
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main function
 with high quality and satisfy things. To
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inference
infrence
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 at the moment
people
's lifestyle is more easily. They will have been bought any items in
stay
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 at home. I am positive
this
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