countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world Do you think this is a positive or negarive development

As an individualist are being to purchase the same type of property which to need for life anywhere in the world its seems in region origin independents and resemblance.In the forthcoming paragraph, I put my own viewpoint about
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nations go too far far-off to purchase which they did not present and
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think.Many people disappeared or died at
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. The rich families bought everything
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apply where they lived.
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needed for sicks. They near persons went far obscure. If they came on time they might be saved sicks life
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ways. Nowadays countries upgrade with any fields. As well as railways, roads and
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have been improving. Market and online economy have been developing. Products are made for imported in foreign countries usually of high quality. Costumers do not waste time, energy, money to ways and not justification pedestrian travelling,
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people are able to expend money on high-end products.
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exports and imports contribute
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financial parts. At present within countries appear rivalry to
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out their product to the world market. They search on
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function with high quality and satisfy things. To ,
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at the moment people's lifestyle is more easily. They will have been bought any items in the stay at home. I am positive
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