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As global trade increases, many goods including those we use on a daily basis are produced in other countries and have to be transported long distance.  Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

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Due to
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 the rise in worldwide sales, many
products
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 that are utilized on a
day to day
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 basis are manufactured in different nations and have to be shipped to faraway distances. I believe that
this
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 has more positive implications than negative. Admittedly, transporting
goods
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 from one country to another does not come without its drawbacks. One minor demerit is that it leads to food spoilage.
This
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 is because the
products
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 that are being transported
takes
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 a long time to get to the destination country, and as
such
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 the
goods
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 get spoilt in the process.
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, my Neighbor’s
products
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 that were moved from Lagos State to Abia State, by road, took more than a week, and , in the process, all the produce rotted.
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, produce
get
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 spoilt when moved to far distance.
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, despite the above minor drawback, I believe the advantage associated with the transportation of
goods
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 to a long-distance far supersedes its
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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. One major benefit is that it increases the revenue of the host country.
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, the exporting nation has more income being generated
as a result
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 of the
products
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 they export.
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, the income of China has greatly increased because they export
products
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 globally. So, countries gain more when they transport
goods
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to
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over
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 long distances. In conclusion,
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 the transportation of produce to distant countries has some demerits, I believe that the benefit in terms of a rise in the income of the exporting nation far surpasses the drawback of food spoilage. Efforts should be made by relevant authorities to make it a norm.
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