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Every year several languages die out. Some people think this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern days, the situation that every person in a family all possess one or
other
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 tech device is utterly common. Many
people
 argue that the excessive use of these gadgets has a negative impact on family relationships as well as communication within. In
fact
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 I completely agree with
this
 statement, and I will describe my reasons in the essay below Ever since digital and modern devices were invented,
people
 have been rushing to buy and own these
kind
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gadgets
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 and immerse themselves in the virtual world
instead
 of spending their leisure time with their
family
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. The alarming fact is that
people
, especially youngsters are absolutely attached
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 their modern technology, which resulted in many bad things
such
 as reduced socializing and unhealthiness. Spending time with
people
 you love, your family is
such
 an important routine to strengthen the bond,
otherwise
, family members would start feeling cold and distant.
Besides
, the introduction of social media apps had
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 the problem even more. The sharing of videos, personal images is becoming more and more common lately. In fact, many
people
 just spew up their private information on
such
 social sites without thinking twice.
This
 may lead to the user's leak of intimate info or even become victims of scammers and hackers.
For instance
, a leading newspaper recently reported the news of
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 between a celebrity couple because the husband was sharing the couple's private picture on his social media account. To wrap up, technology is obviously beneficial in every aspect of life,
however
, the overusing of it is always harmful, so we need to know how to adjust our use, in order to get the most out of it while keeping out from the hazards.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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