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More and more parents are allowing their children to play on computers and tablets as they think that children should learn technology skills. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is generally acknowledged that youngsters tend to increasingly use electronic devices
such
 as
computers
 and tablets in
this
 contemporary society as their parents permit
this
 trend in order to increase
children
's technological ability. Regarding
this
, I strongly believe that the benefit of
this
 trend
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 the drawback. On the one hand, some populations
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 that using PC for an excessive amount of time by
children
 decreases social interaction, thereby leading to disruption of growth. Since a significant number of kids focus on the tiny screen all day, they do not communicate and play with peers in person. What is more,
sedentery
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sedentary
lifestyle
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 with laptops interfere with growth
.
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For example
, recent media reports that almost 10% of young
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 have a tendency that their heights and weights are smaller than other ones. As the example clearly illustrates, consumption of too much time on
computers
 disrupts
children
 to
be grow
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adaquately
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adequately
.
On the other hand
, learning about technology plays a key factor in adaption in
this
 fast
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 world. Not only can gaining technological skill be helpful for studying remotely in foreign countries, but it may
also
provides
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 chances to experience various content indirectly through the Internet.
For instance
, a survey conducted by the Korea Educational Foundation has revealed that pupils who have owned
computers
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 an early age become more knowledgeable than other mates.
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, it is reasonable to point out that they can have more chances to adapt
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 society than others who do not have used
computers
. In conclusion, while I accept that
children
 who use electronic apparatus too much can sometimes be antisocial, thereby leading to a delay of growth, there is no doubt to point out that the advantage is way higher than the disadvantage.
However
, I recommend that when
children
 use items
such
 as tablets, they need to be monitored by
guardiances
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guardians
.
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