Weddings are getting bigger and more expensive. What is the reason for this? Is it a positive or negative developments?

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Nowadays, people

are believing

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that their marriage life should have to be started by having a fancy ceremony. Unfortunately, a fancy function is concluded by spending many unwanted expenses. From my point of view, couples react

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living in a materialist world.I will mention in the below essay the side effect of

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kind of development. On

one

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hand, I believe that the reason behind planning for an overpriced wedding has been caused by living in a materialist nature. Where the couple or the family give more consideration to how people will judge their living standards based on the financial cost of their wedding.

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, they might not be enough confident that egotists can be fulfilled in so many ways other than adding costs.

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, the poor family arranges the ceremony over their budget by comparing the standard of rich family weddings in spite of their poverty.

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to that,

this

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kind of development will not benefit society and it might affect the next generation. The community will not experience and work for the growth of the country.

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, it can

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lead the young generation to avoid getting married at an earlier age

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the lack of financial capability.

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, couples will live together for ages without getting married and live their

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money for their wedding ceremony

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of enjoying their time. In conclusion, The value of a marriage life must not be measured by how big or expensive

it's

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. The world economy is increasing rapidly which might lead to so many drawbacks in the future. If we aren't prepared now,

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it might lead to

bankrupts

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in the future.

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, the world has to be aware and take

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apply

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action effectively by utilizing their funds in a productive method.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

303 words

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