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the alteration of the Tomson road as it now and its plan in the future.

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The given maps illustrate the alteration of the Tomson road as it is now and its plan in the future. Overall, there are noticeable changes after the construction take place and the significant changes can be seen in the addition of extra facilities. Presently, there is Forest avenue running from the northeast to the southwest, one side lane named Law lane is there,on the left side,which leads to the school towards the northwest. On each side of
this
 lane, there are a number of houses. a city avenue is located towards the north running from the west to the east, a pathway leading to a supermarket is there to the northeast. It can be seen that having frequent accidents at the intersection and the linked roads. There will be enormous changes in the future, a roundabout will be added between the forest roadway and the city road, which a new pathway leading to the supermarket. On the four corners between the city road and the law land, the four traffic lights will be there.
As a result
, the number of an accident will be decline.
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