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the alteration of a health care center between 2005 and the present.

The given maps illustrate the alteration of a health care centre between 2005 and the present. Overall, there are noticeable changes after the construction take
place
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 and the significant changes can be seen in the addition of extra facilities. In 2005, a car parking was located in front of the building, which accommodates about 12cars.
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, the main entrance was there, which there were consulting
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 3 and office
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 towards the west, while two other consulting rooms are there towards the east. The reception was located at the end of the hall, and there was a physiotherapy
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 at the back of the building. Presently, the car parking is extended to house for 30 cars. The consulting
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 1 and 2 are there in
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 of the main entrance, which is moved to the southwest corner. The reception and the addition of the kids' play area are right after the entrance.
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,the office is smaller in its size and the consulting
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 3 is relocated to the
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 of consulting room1, which
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 to it is a new smaller consult
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 4.
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, the physiotherapy
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 remains in its
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, which is the construction of minor operations
room
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 on the left side.

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