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WRITING TASK 2 Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older? Write 250 words.

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It is widely known that some parents would buy their
children
 whatever they ask for and allow them to do whatever they want. In my personal opinion,
this
 is not a good way
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 raising
children
 because by applying that style of parenting, we
unconciously
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 have trained the
children
 to become
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, when they got older, they will act as they wish without knowing that there are some rules in every situation. All their wishes
also
 must be obeyed without realizing whether it is good for them or not. By allowing
children
 to do whatever they want and buying whatever they ask for, we
unconciously
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unconsciously
 have trained the
children
 to become
spoiled
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. They will cry loudly when their wish is not fulfilled. They will be more dependent
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 their parents. When they got older, they will act as they wish. Growing up, they will not know that there are rules in our social life. The rules must be obeyed. All their wishes
also
 must be obeyed, they do not realize whether their wishes are good or not.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • indulgent
  • entitlement
  • discipline
  • responsibility
  • nurturing
  • self-reliance
  • adversity
  • autonomy
  • validation
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