WRITING TASK 2 Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older? Write 250 words.

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, for some parent, fulfilling
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children
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's wishes become a source of happiness, I believe it will bring unwanted impact on their
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life,
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I regard it as
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worst way to raise a child.
Children
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need to learn about how to differentiate between necessity and wants
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so that in the
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, they can prioritise goods they need over goods they want. Even for some
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,
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decision may still
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a hard choice.
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is what had happened in a village in Indonesia, when the land
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needed by the government for an
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infrastructure
project, the people in the village received
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sum of money for compensation.
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, because of lacking the skill to choose what they really need and what they do not,
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large fortune
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dissipated in a flash.
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, they are now
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back
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their initial financial state, as
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lower income citizens
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lower income
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citizens.
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, in order to not
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such
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an adult
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adult
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in the
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, the
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need to learn how to restrain their
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and focus on fulfilling their needs only. It is achieved by giving explanation when
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request toys, snacks, which is actually not needed by them. With
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kind of restriction, accompanied by logical explanation,
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children
will be familiar with
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decision making.
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in the
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, they will ask themself, do
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really need
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? Do the benefit of buying
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thing outweigh the price
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have to pay?
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, they will become an efficient generation in the
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. To sum up, teaching
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to restrain their
unecessary
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unnecessary
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desire, accompanied by logical explanation, is a better way to raise
children
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than fulfilling whatever they want, as it
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them to become an adult who
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their logic when facing
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every problem to decide.
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