Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important profession. Some people think that is fully justified while other thing that it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is the fact is that the famous athletes can gain higher pay compared to other fields of
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others think it is fully unfair. I believe that it is unfair for other important professions of
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essay. On the one hand, Those who believe that famous gameplay gains a huge of money because they represent the country of all over the world as well as make us proud of all the
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of nations.
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, they create a world record of the country.
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, they can follow a hard diet and spend more than
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for practice. So it is totally fair to earn a great more amount than Other fields
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think that it is wrong with other stream
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, Other important field workers spend more
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than sportspeople.
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, scientists can make formulas, medicines, new technology and so on. for all
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in their life.
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, sometimes military employees lost their lives for the country and for nations
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, But they could not be famous and not gain a high salary.
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, It is unfair to other field employees because they
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do hard work and give
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to society and the nation. In conclusion, a Successful sports person can deserve more money than other fields
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it is fair for them while others think that it is unjustified to other professionals. I feel that it is unfair of other streams professionals.
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