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School children are becoming far too dependent on computers. this is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. teacher need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all cost and go back to teaching basic study skills. do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, most school students are dependent on
computers
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 and
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 is having a negative effect on
Children
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's reading
skills
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 and writing
skills
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.
Moreover
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, teachers
also
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 need to avoid using electronic devices in schools for teaching
children
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. And they have to teach
children
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 to
use
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 basic
study
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skills
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. I will completely agree with
this
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 statement and examine it in my upcoming paragraph. To commence with, In the present, Technology has increasing day by day and
that is
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 why a student is
use
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computers
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, laptop and tablets for their
study
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 purpose. Because of ,that they face so many problems in their
study
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.
Such
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 as reading and writing
skills
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.
Firstly
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, more
use
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 of
computers
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 in their education's, they not more concentrate on reading and after , sometimes they feel boring.
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, they lose their interest in reading.
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,
also
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 affect writing
skills
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. Due to the
use
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 of
computers
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 students are not good at handwriting. And
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 they are not good at spelling.
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, Teachers are using an electronic device to teach students at the starting
age
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 of learning. At that ,
age
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children
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 learn basic things and practical methods of teaching not based on
computers
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.,
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 after some
age
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,
children
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 are grown up
then
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 definitely right to
use
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computers
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 or laptops for their
study
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. But at an earlier ,
age
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 is not worth it. In conclusion, school
children
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 are mostly dependent on
computers
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 for their
study
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 but they create a lot of drawbacks in educational time. And
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 teachers should avoid using
use
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computers
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 and teaching as a regular basic
study
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 method.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dependence on technology
  • reading comprehension
  • traditional learning techniques
  • literacy skills
  • digital tools integration
  • educational outcomes
  • pedagogical strategies
  • information overload
  • interactive learning
  • educational software
  • balance in education
  • technological advancement
  • fundamental skills
  • creativity and critical thinking
  • well-rounded education
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