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Nowadays, not many university students choose science subjects in many countries. What are the reasons? What are the effects on the society?

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Various countries currently experience a lack of interest towards scientific disciplines in tertiary- education. One of the possible reasons is the standard of teaching exact sciences in our schools.
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 trend may lead to shortages of qualified specialists in the engineering and bioengineering fields. Studying maths, physics and chemistry has always been an extremely challenging task. They are exceedingly time-consuming subjects
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 requiring experienced teaching. Poor standards of teaching can cause pupils to miss vital aspects of the subject.
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, in my home country,
students
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 in secondary schools have a choice to study higher or ordinary-
level
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 maths. For that reason, whenever a child struggles with maths, he tends to drop to the lower
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instead
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 of being encouraged to persist with the one he is currently at. In short, a lack of support may inevitably discourage young people from studying mathematical sciences. The low
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 of science graduates will eventually reduce the
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 of specialists in areas like technology, engineering and chemistry. A lot of effort has been made to promote scientific studies to prospective
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.
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, some universities are organising various educational programs for children as young as twelve years old to develop an interest in those subjects. Unfortunately, despite all the efforts, prospective
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 find the idea of studying science subjects at the university
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 extremely daunting.
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, not a sufficient
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 of graduates will be available to join the workforce. In conclusion, the standard of teaching scientific disciplines at the secondary school
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 is vital for young people progressing to the university
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.
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, an insufficient
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 of college
students
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 studying sciences will eventually bring a deficit of qualified specialists in the areas, we can not imagine our life without these days.

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