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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Every country tries to make different opportunities in the transport system to their population in order to create conveniences to get their location. public think, the government should give more attention to roads than other sections. In my view, it is the right option. On a hand, if you want to economize on payment, the railway system is one the best options for travelling long distances. Because you do not need to expend many bills. At the same time, railroad lines have superiority with safety among other ways. Hardly ever situation you may encounter with unfortunate accidents.
Also
, road lines pass through awesome nature. By the way, you see beautiful views and feel the love of nature.
On the other hand
, the government do not have to spend much money on roads. Because railways are made from iron and it is one of the durable materials. So it does not need to reconstruct for many years. When it comes to asphalt, the roadway needs to renovate in a few years.
Secondly
, because of its comfortable and quickness peculiarity in your busy daily
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 you use mostly buses, cars to get to your refuge.
For example
, in urgent situations related to fair, crime, crash, people's health time play an essential role.
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, when you drive a car or get a taxi you do not need to stand in a long queue at the railway station to buy a ticket. In
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 both of transport system has their own importance. Railways attract people with their safety and low prices.
However
, when it comes to time requirements people use roads because of their hectic lifestyles. So according to
this
 government should spend more money on them.
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