In some poorer areas of large cities people are too afraid to leave their houses at night time due to a fear of crime. What are the causes of crime in those areas and what can be done to tackle those problems?

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Quality of life is significantly dependent on where you live. Regarding a couple of

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in a big city, people are scared to go out in the dark due to crime rates and

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essay will discuss the causes of

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situation and suggest ideas for the solution. Nothing

cannot

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be an excuse to perform a crime for sure but if a person

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any kind of criminal activity, we must question their motivation or reason.

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of all, fairly poorer areas in big cities cannot offer plenty of

job

opportunities for habitants

therefore

unemployment might lead

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desperately perform any kind of small crimes

such

as burglary or snatching.

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to that, underdeveloped areas surely can not serve a well organized educational system to children of their residents. Without getting a proper and decent education, no one would expect students to build up a nice future with a well-paid

job

. Not even getting a

job

, these students wouldn'

learn how to behave in

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right manner within a society. There are many things

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be done in order to decrease the criminal incidents in a certain

neigborhood

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neighbourhood

First

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and most important thing to be done is to increase the

life

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standards of the residents. To do so, the government must take responsibility and make investments to create new

job

opportunities in the area, so that criminals would not stay unemployed

thus

being broke and desperate won'

be an excuse for them.

Secondly

, education must be improved in the area.

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can be performed by establishing new and modern schools and filling those schools with teachers who are good in different fields. So that students wouldn'

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any knowledge compared to their peers and they can progress and build up a future for themselves in the area of their desire. In conclusion, criminal occasions won'

stop in a poor neighbourhood if the residents can get equal educational of financial support like

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of the city. Government must step up and take responsibility in terms of funding these

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about these fields.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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In some poorer areas of large cities people are too afraid to leave their houses at night time due to a fear of crime. What are the causes of crime in those areas and what can be done to tackle those problems?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

In some countries, many people do not have enough money to access the internet. Should governments be responsible for ensuring that everyone can get access to the internet?

Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disargee?

Some people think that learning news from newspapers is the best way. Others, however, say that there are more effective ways of learning news from other media. Discuss both points of view and give your opinions

Task 2- Childhood obesity is an increasing problem in Australia as many as two thirds of children are now obese. Schools have a responsibility to monitor what their students eat and the amount of exercise they do. To what extend do you agree to this statemen