Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Technology improvement has a prominent impact on society,
for
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instance
doing work from home or online study is possible nowadays. Add a comma
instance,
As the
refining of online systems in both prices and accessibility Correct word choice
The
make
remote activity Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
become
more available, which altered modern society's perspective towards online activity. I believeVerb problem
apply
,
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this
transformation has its own advantages and disadvantages.
The most influenced by Linking Words
this
change is efficiency, Linking Words
such
as time and money usage. Time management will be easier to conduct since people will be doing their job and learning in their homes, Linking Words
therefore
they will Linking Words
be
not waste time Unnecessary verb
apply
on
driving. Change preposition
apply
In addition
, they could use it to do the task or study Linking Words
instead
of driving. In terms of money, the labour and student would save the gas bill. Linking Words
Moreover
, the lunch could be done in their home, Linking Words
hence
it will save the meal budget.
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On the other hand
, doing work or studying remotely would Linking Words
bring
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have
immense
effect Correct article usage
an immense
in
direct socializing. Since they will not interact directly, it would Change preposition
on
make
a huge gap in communication skills. Even though, communication could be done by video conference and chatting. It is still different from face-to-face socializing. Where you could feel the warm chat and body contact with your partner or engage in the group task with your peer Verb problem
create
for example
. Those simple interactions would lead to a better bond between people. Linking Words
Whereas
, online interaction has Linking Words
scarcity
Correct article usage
a scarcity
in
physical contact.
In conclusion, remote working or class has its own advantages and disadvantages. I believeChange preposition
of
,
the online system would lead society to a brighter era as long as we could use it wisely.Remove the comma
apply
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Task Response
Ensure to fully address the prompt and provide a balanced argument on whether working and studying from home is positive or negative. Include specific examples to support your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction lacks a clear thesis statement and the conclusion is brief. Try to structure your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs with supporting details, and a conclusion that summarizes the main points.