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the TV news viewing figures over a one-year period in four various time.

The given line graph illustrates the TV
news
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 viewing figures over a one-year period in four various times. Overall, the majority of
people
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 viewed
news
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 at 6pm and there was a
number
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 of
people
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 viewing
news
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 at 11 am starting in May. According to the line graph, In January, the highest amount of
people
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 watching the
news
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 at 6 pm,with about almost millions
viewers
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 per
day
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;
however
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 its
number
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 showed a steadily fall,with a period of fluctuation, dropping to just over 3
million
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viewers
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 per
day
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 in December.
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, the
number
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 of
viewers
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 who watched the
news
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 at 1 pm flattened off at approximately just over 1
million
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viewers
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 per
day
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 throughout the year.
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, at
first
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, the figure of
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 viewing at 9.30 am rose steeply;
however
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, following June the viewing rate dropped dramatically to only 1
million
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viewers
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 per
day
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. Over the four months, from September to December, the figure went up again to 3
million
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viewers
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 per
day
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. It is interesting to note that there was a
number
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 of
people
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 watching the
news
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 at 11 a.m. starting in May, accounting for around 100000
viewers
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 per
day
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. Following three months, its figure rose significantly to exactly 4
million
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viewers
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.
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, the remaining months witnessed the
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 fell noticeably to just under 1
million
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viewers
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.

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