Nowadays museums and historical sites are visited mainly by foreign tourists rather than by locals. Why is this happening? What can be done to get locals to visit museums and historical sites more often?

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argued that recently most of the visitors who visit museums and heritage places are foreigners
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will discuss the reasons
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it and
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government and private institutions could do
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solve the problem.
First
and foremost, many
people
think that going sightseeing or the historical places near we live isn’t much important thing, because locals aren’t eager to visit the familiar history and culture they have lived with for a long time.
Moreover
, the entrance fee of these
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are relatively high,
it’s
worthless for local inhabitants
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time and money on them.
On the other hand
, the main reason tourists visit a country is to learn about
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culture and history of the host country, and the museums and historical sites are the best way for the purposes.
Hence
, even though the entry fee is huge the foreign tourists are willing to pay to fill their curiosity. In order to get
people
’s attention, we need to have good strategies ahead of applying practically.
First
, due to the high entry fee which
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local
people
behind,
government
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should lower
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charge or give locals some reasonable discount.
Also
,
authority
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must bring histories into
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a subject
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subject
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that could
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at school and have
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lesson
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for the pupil.
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,
it’s
attractive if the lesson could integrate technology
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private company funding. If the strategies performed well,
it’s
a great benefit for the locality. In conclusion, despite the fact that local
people
show less interest in local museums and historical sites, there are several ways government and organizations could do to enhance the desire of participating in local culture.
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