The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Various steps involved in the commercial production of frozen fish pies are sequenced in the given diagram. It is clear from the diagram that the
preparation
process is separate and the main ingredients here are fresh salmon, peas, sauce and potatoes. The potatoes are delivered to the factory up to a month in advance. These are cleaned thoroughly, peeled and
then
sliced. These are stored for the pie
preparation
after two steps: boiling and chilling. Turning to the fish
preparation
, the delivery of salmon slices is to be made to the factory within 12 hours prior to the process. Lemon juice and salt are added to these slices before they are steamed in the oven. In the
next
step, skin and bones are removed from it manually.
This
is followed by a thorough visual inspection. For the pie
preparation
, peas and sauce are needed, and these are prepared ahead of wrapping the pie in
the
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microwaveable containers. The pies are wrapped manually in a systematic way
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and are frozen before they are either stored or dispatched.
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