The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The main purpose of the diagrams is to provide information about how to make frozen fish pies. It takes several steps to go from delivering the main ingredients by
trucks
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to a product of frozen fish pie.
According to
the diagrams, the main ingredients consist of fresh salmon, peas, sauce and
potatoes
. The yam
are
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prepared separately from others. The first step of
potatoes
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the potatoes
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is cleaning,
then
the
potatoes
are peeled and cut into the slice.
Thereafter
, they are cooked with boiling and before using, they are
cooling
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. Meanwhile, on the other side of the manufacturing process,
firstly
, the fresh salmons are brined with lemon juice and salt for at most 12 hours before it goes cooking in a steam oven.
Then
, skins and bones are removed by hand and disposed of, and the salmons are visually inspected before continuing
the
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next
step.
The
next
step is the assembled all prepared ingredients. Prepared peas and sauce are combined with the salmons in a microwaveable container
then
, it is covered with a layer of
the
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cooked
potatoes
.
Then
,
this
container is wrapped and frozen. At
this
point, they are ready for dispatch or they are maybe stored at the factory before being dispatched.
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