:Human activities have negative effects on plant and animal species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

During these days, plants and animal
spiecies
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species
are being suffered disadvantages of
people
's manners. The public
have
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has
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been discussing
this
heated debate with different opinions. Some claim that nothing can be done at
this
late time while the others suggest that
this
situation can be developed by taking useful methods.
This
essay will explain not only these two ideas but
also
my perspective. In my opinion, activities that have
done
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been done
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by human beings are very cruel to animal species and
also
trees
.
For example
,
people
tend to cut a lot of big
trees
which causes
deforestlization
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deforestation
because of their
greedy
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.
As a result
, the
animals
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lose
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loose
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lose
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their grazing places. What is more, some unique
animals
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animal
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species are being sold to make medicines by scientists and some are being tortured. On the one hand,
People
are given so many chances to recreate the
euquitable
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equitable
suitable
place both for living or
non living
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non-living
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organisims
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organisms
.
In addition
, it is not too late to solve
this
question. If nothing is done about
this
action, there can be more negative effects for plants and
animals
. To address
this
problem,
some
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several steps must be done.
First
of all, the
gorvenment
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government
must restrict the law concerned with cutting
trees
.
Next
, if
people
are not following the law, a serious punishment have to be taken.
Moreover
, the
gorvenment
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government
have to create a certain day in which
people
have to plant the
trees
near their houses and feed the homeless
animals
. Most importantly,
people
have to be taught the demerits of their
actvities
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activities
so that they can reduce their actions. To sum up, every bad
things
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thing
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can be fixed in
this
world and it takes only
times
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time
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.
Hence
,
people
are the
one
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ones
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who can make the world better.
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  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • extinction
  • reforestation
  • conservation programs
  • environmental laws
  • ecosystems
  • technological advances
  • awareness
  • interconnectivity
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem services
  • preserving
  • wildlife
  • mitigate
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  • economic and social benefits
  • incentives
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