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Not long ago ,people stored information in books. These days people store knowledge on the internet. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays it is quite common to use the
internet
 to store
knowledge
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even though
people
 used
books
 often before. Even
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elementary
 school students enjoy searching
information
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for information
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 on the
internet
 at their school and home when they are looking for some ideas. I believe that the advantages of storing
knowledge
 on the
internet
donot
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do not
don't
 outweigh the disadvantages. Through analysing the possibility that
informacion
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information
 of
internet
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the internet
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 contains false as well as the
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dangerousness
 of depriving the
ability
 of thinking by themselves.
First
 of all, compared to
books
, there
are
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 a lot of false
information
 on the
internet
 because anybody can write
down
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it down
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 on the form.
For instance
, a web page says that smoking is good for reducing
weights
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 and another one says that for shaping your body,
people
 should not smoke. It is difficult to find
an
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 correct answer for citizens because there are
prenty
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plenty
 of
infomacion
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information
 including false ones.
Therefore
,
people
 can find
an propper
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propper information
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information
 in
books
not
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,not
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 on the
internet
.
Moreover
,
People
 can not
grew
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 up the
ability
 of thinking when they use
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internet
intenet
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the intenet
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 for
sarching
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searching
information
.
For example
, for finding some answer,
people
 only need
putting
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to put
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 some keywords on the searching box while
people
 need to go
library
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to library
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 and look for a book which
supplys
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supplies
supply
 good
information
.
People
 think more deeply when they try to get
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by
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books
 than
the
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on the
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internet
.
Thus
,
sroring
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storing
knowledge
 by
books
make
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makes
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 thinking
ability
 strong when they try to find some
ansewers
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answers
. In summary, the
internet
 has a
a
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lot of false
information
 and the
internet
 contains the dangerousness of depriving thinking
ability
from
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of
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people
.
Therefore
, I believe that the benefits of storing
knowledge
 on the
internet
donot
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do not
don't
 outweigh the disadvantages.
Eventhoug
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Even though
 the
internet
 has spread greatly for storing
information
on
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 decades,
people
 need to
concider
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consider
 about the influences of
this
 situation.
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