Some people think that traditional culture can be destroyed it as money making attractions to tourists. However, others believe that it is only way to save traditions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Traditional
culture
are shared experiences that Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
transferred
from generation to generation. People have Add a missing verb
are transferred
varied
Add an article
a varied
opinion
on Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
legand
cultures. Which are ruined as a Correct your spelling
legend
money making
system. While some others think that it is the one and only way to protect our Add a hyphen
money-making
culture
. This
essay will examine both these opinions before arriving at a conclusion.
On the one hand, culture
and heritage tourism
is a fast growing
and high yielding sector. Heritage Add a hyphen
fast-growing
tourism
are
mainly focused on economic benefits. Change the verb form
is
This
system creates new jobs and businesses instance, the businesman
invest more Correct your spelling
businessman
money
in the business and use it as a profit making
system. Add a hyphen
profit-making
Moreover
, someones
Fix the agreement mistake
someone
presents
old art forms with unskilled people to Change the verb form
present
hunting
tourists Wrong verb form
hunt
money
so that, it is understandable that many pupits
saving Correct your spelling
pupils
puppets
pulpits
money
from this
tourism
.
On the other
hand
Add a comma
,hand
tourism
has a
important role in preserving Change the article
an
culture
today travellers are looking for visiting the historical place and searching for amicent
cultures. Researchers Correct your spelling
ancient
ambient
proven
that Add the auxiliary verb
have proven
proved
this
tourism
can protect cultural heritage through community empowerment. For example
, when tourists are educated about the history and traditions of the local community, and
it turns that community feels a stronger cohesion and sense of pride in that cultural history. Correct word choice
apply
In addition
, tourism based
around cultural asset encourages locals Add a hyphen
tourism-based
continue
to pass on traditions and Add the particle
to continue
practice
that are in their history.
In conclusion, many people Fix the agreement mistake
practices
increasing
Wrong verb form
increase
there
savings through traditional Replace the word
their
culture
tourism
. In my view, tourism
is the
one of the best Correct article usage
apply
method
to preserve it and Change to a plural noun
methods
also
it gives visitors the opportunity to broaden his
own personal horizons.Correct pronoun usage
their
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