Some people think that traditional culture can be destroyed it as money making attractions to tourists. However, others believe that it is only way to save traditions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Traditional

culture

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cultures

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are shared experiences that

transferred

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are transferred

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from generation to generation. People have

varied

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a varied

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opinion

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opinions

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on

legand

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legend

cultures. Which are ruined as a

money making

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money-making

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system. While some others think that it is the one and only way to protect our

culture

.

This

essay will examine both these opinions before arriving at a conclusion. On the one hand,

culture

and heritage

tourism

is a

fast growing

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fast-growing

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and high yielding sector. Heritage

tourism

are

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mainly focused on economic benefits.

This

system creates new jobs and businesses instance, the

businesman

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businessman

invest more

money

in the business and use it as a

profit making

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profit-making

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system.

Moreover

,

someones

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someone

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presents

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old art forms with unskilled people to

hunting

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tourists

money

so that, it is understandable that many

pupits

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pupils

puppets

pulpits

saving

money

from

this

tourism

.

On the other

hand

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tourism

has

a

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important role in preserving

culture

today travellers are looking for visiting the historical place and searching for

amicent

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ancient

ambient

cultures. Researchers

proven

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have proven

proved

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that

this

tourism

can protect cultural heritage through community empowerment.

For example

, when tourists are educated about the history and traditions of the local community,

and

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apply

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it turns that community feels a stronger cohesion and sense of pride in that cultural history.

In addition

,

tourism based

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tourism-based

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around cultural asset encourages locals

continue

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to pass on traditions and

practice

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practices

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that are in their history. In conclusion, many people

increasing

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there

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their

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savings through traditional

culture

tourism

. In my view,

tourism

is

the

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apply

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one of the best

method

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to preserve it and

also

it gives visitors the opportunity to broaden

his

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their

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own personal horizons.