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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything they try hard enough what are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

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In some countries,youngsters are often motivated that they can attain whatever they want if they spend most of the time in that particular activity.
This
 essay will discuss both merits and demerits of giving
this
 important message.
This
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work
 as much as possible to them as there are ample positive implications of
this
 phenomenon.
Firstly
,they can reach the
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,which make them identity and
fame
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 among the public.
For instance
,many renowned
people
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 as doctors,teachers and politicians have gained
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huge popularity
between
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people
 as when they were young they used to do
work
 mostly in order to get success.
Secondly
,the main significant benefit is that they lead a good luxurious life in terms of taking care of their family members.
Consequently
,individuals can become independent when they get a good job.
Moreover
,they have to come to know about the other individual's traits when they will
work
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 some negative impacts
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this
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Initially
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although
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 of entertainment and enjoyment.
For example
,if the younger
people
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 to do more hard
work
,
then
 they feel that it is a burden for them.
As a result
,their brain leads to stress regarding both
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mental and physical fitness.
In addition
,not only
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people
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their knowledge. On another hand,
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 coin has both sides.The pros are recognition and
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 job.Eventually,they might be delighted.
In contrast
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wisdom.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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