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A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The two maps illustrate how the Islip town centre will be transformed for its future development from what it looks like now. Overall, the layout of
this
 town
center
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 will be more modernized along with several additions and upgrades. To
east
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, with two branches extending to the school in the southwest and the
park
 in the southeast. Meanwhile, a large residential area can be noticed, half of which is surrounded by those branches and another half is located on the east side of the school. Shops are standing along both sides of the main roads. Moving to the planned scheme, a dual carriageway will replace the main road, surrounding the town
center
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. The school and the
park
 will stand in the same place,
however
, the size of the
park
 will be shrunk to make room for building new houses. The shops now located in the north will be transformed, from left to right, into a bus station, a shopping
center
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 and a new car
park
.
Additionally
, new residential areas will be built to the northeast within the ring road.
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