Health experts claim that walking is the best exercise. However, people are walking less on a daily basis. What has made it happen and how to deal with this? Write at least 250 words.

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exercise
basically
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very good for health. And of
course
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walking is the best
exercise
, since it doesn't need fancy equipment and
very
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good physique. The walking
exercise
can be done anywhere.
The walking
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can prevent
from
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obbesity
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obesity
, which
is happens
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a lot in society. According to me, many factors affecting people are walking less, e.g. inadequate infrastructure, polluted weather, and lack of will for some people. It
require
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the involvement of
many
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any
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party
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to deal with it
such
as
government
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the government
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, health society, etc. we need to encourage people to do more walking
exercise
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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