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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role of education of children Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #school #children #homework #teachers #role #education
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 part of
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 system of students, while opponents claim that tutors should not give a
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home
. I partly agree with both sides of
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. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall discuss both ideas and suggest my opinion. On the one hand, these days government pays
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educational
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 system of schools and the majority of themes are become harder, compared to the past two decades. It is a heavy
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students
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 to do several exercises every day in four or five subjects as a
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As a result
 of load at school, the child
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looses
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 his interest
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 subjects and his scores show a negative outcome. Some countries in the world are
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 the method of educating without doing
homework
.
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 bright example of
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 can be Japan where youngers do not perform doing
homework
 at primary school, as adults think it is
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enough
though
 for pupils to get knowledge at classes and provide them
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 opportunity to digest all
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 they got.
On the other hand
, there is another side
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 avoiding
hometask
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home task
.
Firstly
, each theme taught at school need
for
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consolidation of material and additional exercises at
home
 are beneficial to make sure schoolman that each student understood everything.
Moreover
, complementary progress at
home
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young
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generation
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 to obtain
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forceful knowledge and expands their horizons enriching their inner world.
Secondly
, while doing given work alone,
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becomes
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 independent and learn
doing
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homework
 without depending on anyones' help. For
instanse
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instance
, all schools in Uzbekistan lead a trend of giving
home
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 for students, in order to secure their cognition. To conclude, a part of
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 say that children must do
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the home
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task
 at
home
, while others think it is not necessary for elements of education.
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However
, I believe that each child should receive information, but in a limited number for developing his
intelect
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intellect
 and not burden him in parallel
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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