Some people think that it is the responsibility of governments to take care of the environment, while others believe that it is the responsibility of the citizens. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is undeniable that nowadays humanity faces a plethora of unprecedented environmental
problems
, and people hold different views about whether these
problems
should be solved by the
authorities
or
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is the responsibility of
individuals
.
Although
the
government
can lessen environmental degradation by imposing stricter laws and promoting awareness, I am inclined to believe that
individuals
can bring greater
contribution
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through
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change
of
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their daily
routine
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. The
government
, taking into account
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tremendous power it possesses, may exert an influence on environmental degradation through laws and fines.
In other words
, if appropriate laws are introduced,
individuals
with a rather careless attitude towards the seriousness of environmental disasters
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may be prevented from harming
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nature by the fear of being punished by the authority. The effectiveness of
this
so-called system was proven in 2019, when the US
government
imposed a law, about criminal prosecution of those, who kill endangered monkey species. By the following year, the number of killed animals had reduced almost twofold.
In addition
,
introduction
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of various awareness campaigns seems a great solution to a huge part of
problems
,
such
as climate change and deforestation. Awareness schemes, introduced in educational premises may help combat
such
hurdles by fostering in
individuals
consciousness about these
problems
, which will definitely lead to some practical benefits in the long-term future.
For instance
, one of
such
schemes was established by
Kazakh
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government
in order to reduce the amount of manifold forest fires.
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there
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no apparent benefits now,
authorities
promised that we would see them in the future.
Inspite
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In spite
of all actions that public
authorities
can take, citizens' impact on the planet should not be overlooked.
Firstly
, each individual, regardless of whether they have a private vehicle or travel by public transportation means, has
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carbon footprint-the amount of emissions per person. The reduction of it, which depends on each citizen, leads to
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significant improvements in the quality of air, water, and life in general.
Secondly
, since
the
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undisposable goods are widely used, each person is responsible for diminishing
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use or even replacing these items
on
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more
environmentally-friendly
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ones,
hence
making the Earth less polluted. In conclusion, the public
authorities
can vastly improve the nature and diminish the impact that certain citizens have, but I wholeheartedly believe that
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true improvement will appear only after changes in each citizen's daily habits
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task response
Your essay effectively addresses the prompt by discussing both views and expressing your opinion. Make sure to elaborate further on the relevance of the examples to the main points.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable practices
  • environmental protection
  • grassroots movements
  • community-led initiatives
  • policy implementation
  • regulations
  • funding
  • innovative solutions
  • collective effort
  • advocate
  • enforce laws
  • energy-efficient
  • reduce waste
  • recycling
  • sustainable outcomes
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