Besides a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Write 250 words.

Nowadays, we enjoy the era of the
internet
.
People
all around the world get the benefit from it, not only
in
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personal
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level but
also
in a wider scope as a citizen or even as a country. Like the principle of yin and yang, everything has a good and bad side, and
this
is
also
relevant to the
internet
.
Besides
its potential, some
people
think it can do harm to
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being
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, and the threats are bigger than ever. In
this
case, I am in a position where I fully support the
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of the
internet
, so I strongly disagree with the
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that we have to minimize the development of the
internet
. The essay below elaborates the reason why, mainly from the economic and cultural aspects. We are all already experienced the beneficial effect of the
internet
. Because of
this
invention, the market transaction can be done in greater scope.
For instance
, we can sell anything, anywhere and anytime in the online shop, so as a seller, they can reach more potential buyers.
Although
the risk is always there, like black markets or personal information stealing
or
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,
but
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I think it's is something we can tackle.
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common sense if
people
see
this
as a drawback, but if we focus on the negative side, we will be missed
alot
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a lot
of opportunities. Another benefit is in
cultural
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aspect, by the invention of
this
technology, we can socialize
borderlessly
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borderless
, like interacting with
people
from another country. By
this
, we can learn
culture
from someone that has
different
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background,
in
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we can
also
promote our
culture
.
For example
, the Korean Pop lifestyle, back
then
we have little exposure
with
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this
, but because of Youtube or another online platform, we can consume
the
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movies and songs from Korea.
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the other hand, we can
also
promote our
culture
if we want, so they can get informed
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our beautiful country. But, some said that too much exposure to another
culture
can decrease our sense of belonging to
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culture
, but I think
this
idea is too pessimistic
,
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because nowadays
people
are more
openminded
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. So, In
cultural
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aspect, I
thinks
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internet
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is always win
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the good side. Based on
these explanation
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, I am still and always support the development of
internet
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.
Although
its have inherent risk
like
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,
but
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the
ooportunity
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opportunity
we have is open wide if we can utilize
internet
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wisely, primarily because
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its
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benefit to our economy and
culture
. I think we will
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so much if we
didnt
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didn't
support the
internet
era.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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