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Some people believe governments should spend money in saving languages ​​of few speakers from dying out completely. Others think this is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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This
 essay’s discussion is about protecting
languages
 from minority tribes or cultures.
Although
 it is important to maintain a
language
 as potential culture, some people disagree with saving dying
languages
 for financial reasons.
This
 essay is about my disagreement opinion on protecting dying
languages
.
Firstly
, saving a
language
 costs numerous amounts of money and time. Particularly long-term research resources and education programs are required to revive a dying
language
,
such
 as a professional study group of history, lingual, and instruments to teach students all levels.


Secondly
, the success of saving
language
 depends on a number of interests. Without enough people's interest to handle investment costs it’s hard to maintain the
language
. according to many lingual studies research, the symptom of dying
languages
 causes by reducing native speaking groups. In fact,
Language
 revitalization is proportional to the proportion of the population.
Additionally
,
language
 is always changing as time goes even for
languages
 that are majorly used internationally.
For example
, modern English, the most domestic use
language
 today, has been changed over centuries. The origin of the English was so different even native speakers cannot understand it.
In other words
, It's a natural phenomenon to all
languages
 not stationary, and they can easily vanish.
Also
 projecting majorly using
language
 is much more urgent than other
languages
 to use. In conclusion, saving the dying
language
 is a challenging social issue.
Although
 there are so many potentials from each culture and
language
, It requires so many sacrifices.
That is
 why I firmly believe that saving
language
 is financially inefficient.
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