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some people think that the only way to have success in a business is to have a unique product. what factors,do you think,influence the success of a company?

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Achievement is always an
enourmous
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enormous
 struggle for any
company
 in the
business
 world. Some think that having a unique
product
 is the only element that leads a
company
 to an accomplishment.
Well
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 I contradict
to
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that, In my opinion,
success
is not only requires
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does not only require
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 a unique
product
, but
also
 demands many other factors
such
 as marketing, consistency, and sacrifice. Manufacturing a
product
 itself may not be enough for a
company
 to get
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 if the marketing team isn't working properly to be able to sell the
product
. If a
company
 wants to sell its
product
, they need to convince citizens to purchase it
thus
 a
company
 needs a well-organized marketing department. 
In addition
 to that, another essential factor to
success
 is the consistency of the
company
 meaning that a
company
 should never satisfy with just one original
product
. A
business
 must always expand and improve itself by creative thinking and hardworking of the employees. One other thing
that is
also
 crucial to lead in
business
 is a sacrifice from the beauty of life. Both employers and employees must be overworking and brainstorming until late at
nights
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 in order to come up with brilliant ideas to develop the
business
.
Last
 but not least, employers must entice their employees by creating a pleasant work environment which is
also
 inevitable for a
company
 to grow. In conclusion,
success
 is hard to achieve in today's
business
 world. And disdaining
success
 as considering one unique
product
 would be enough is a huge misleading for a
company
 that should be avoided.
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