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Some people are of the opinion that there should be a car-free day once every month, on which no private vehicles are allowed on the road. Discuss the advantages and possible disadvantages.

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A few
people
 are of the view that once in a month, the car-plying should be banned on the roads and owners should give rest to their private carriers. Undoubtedly,
the
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public transport eases the congestion on the roads but cannot provide the comforts of individual conveyance.
To begin
 with, nobody can deny
this
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 fact that more the cars
on
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 the road, the more intense is the pollution. Each individual sitting behind the wheel may take pride in his possession but is not contributing positively
in
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 combating the problem of traffic congestion.
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, if all private automobiles are away from the roads, though, for a day only in a month, the pollution level will certainly come down.
Moreover
, the absence of banging, buzzing and roadway clamour,
sound
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 of the cars will lessen the noise pollution.
Consequently
, we can prevent exposure to health hazards.
On the contrary
,
this
 arrangement will pose a number of problems to the
people
. They will have to compromise their convenience and comfort.
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, public transport will not be able to cater to the needs of a patient who has to reach the hospital in an emergency.
In addition
 to
this
, the erratic schedule of the government buses cannot meet the growing demand of the common
people
.
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, Odd and Even was introduced twice in Delhi but the hue and cry of the masses forced them to withdraw.
Car free
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 day difficult to impose and uncomfortable to accept
,
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 is a practical solution to
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the environment
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environment
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problem
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.
Plethora
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A plethora
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 of benefits associated with
this
 day will certainly inspire
people
 to adopt it as a habit and breathe the fresh and fumeless air.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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