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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling if for government to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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A large proportion of
waste
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 from households is not recycled, and some
people
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 suggest that it is necessary to enforce laws to deal with
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 problem.
This
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 is a viable solution, but I do not think it is a good option. If recycling litterß is legally required,
people
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 will possibly do it;
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, they can be punished. With the force of the laws, those who do not sort
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 misuse may be asked to do some community work or even pay
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 fine for their illegal activities.
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,
people
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 may make a reduction
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 their
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 quality
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 of paying a legal fine.
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, in order to maintain their common
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, they may pay more attention to sorting
waste
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 in their daily
life
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, and it can be seen as a good result of the legal requirement.
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, the government may play an even more important role in educating to increase the proportion of recycling
waste
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. Despite the legal power that would
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people
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 to obey the instructions, it may affect the regular lifestyle of citizens.
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, with the increased investment in education and advertising, the population may realise that unsorted unused materials may make a big impact on the environment. As an example, children would realise the importance of recycling rubbish in their future
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.
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, environmental issues may affect their
life
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 in the unknown future.
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, citizens will discover that it is necessary to recycle the rubbish to protect themselves and the next generation. In conclusion, it is obvious that legal requirements may have related
effort
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 in recycling
waste
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 from home, but the effort of
government
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the government
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,
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 as educating and promoting, is considered important to deal with
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 issue.

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task response
In the introduction, make sure to clearly state your position on whether laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste. Provide a clear thesis statement that outlines your viewpoint.
coherence and cohesion
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