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An increasing number of professional such as doctor and teacher are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. what problem does this cause ? what can be done to deal with this situation ?

#doctor #teacher #countries #work #situation
Nowadays, it is common to see professionals workers like
doctors
 and
teachers
 are going
to
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abroad for a better future for our nation.There are several reasons for
such
 as situation. Both the reasons and measures are elaborated
further
.
To begin
 with, the foremost reason to leave the country's
wages
. To explain it,
doctors
 and
teachers
 are the bloom of humans. They do hard
workor
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work or
 their duties without taking the rest but towards their ,work they
not
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 get aa good salary and
also
 treat like the others common workers.
For example
, in 2020
doctors
 do
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 work to the putting their life in danger but
theydo
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they do
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nott
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 get proper
wages
 for it. To solve
this
 problem the government could put an extra budget for only
doctors
 and
teachers
 and can give them
to
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the best salary To the discussing another reason for leaving the country. To answer it, for the better future and
lifestyle
. It is true that foreign countries have better job opportunities
instead
 of our nati,MoreoverMoreover they provide a good
lifestyle
. For
instthe
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world
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 the world tourism industry has revealed that every year around 20 lakhs people are Canada to a better for a better
lifestyle
. To measure
this
 issue authority should provide good
wages
 job
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 conclusion,
doctors
 and
teachers
 are going to other nations for finding jobs and a bright future. The authority can provide them
to
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 good
wages
 as well as a respected
lifestyle
.
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