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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role of education of children Discuss both views and give your opinion

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There is a heated debate that has been sparked all over the world. It is argued that teachers should change the habit of giving
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others suggest that assignment takes part in a significant role of
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education. Both discussion and perspective will be mentioned
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 by a conclusion. On the one hand, children are more likely to remember their lessons by doing
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everday
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. Since doing assignments is
also
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practising
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, it can make the student perfect and expert in their lessons. What is more, if the teacher is not giving
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, the majority of
students
 will not study the lesson that they have learned at school.
In addition
, while
students
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, they could get more ideas about the course.
For example
, mathematics need a lot of
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practices
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students
 are more able to understand.
On the other hand
, it is
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claimed
 that giving a lot of homework make the lack of free time for children. The
students
 are at the age of fresh, active and happy. Even they have to attend
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school five days per week, they
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 weekends too. They do not have enough time to do their hobbies or
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 activities leading to unhealthy lifestyles.
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 their
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concentration
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 education since they have to do these lessons all the time. They will probably feel boring or sick of school
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. To sum up, I believe that everything is comfortable with
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.
Although
 homework is necessary
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 education, teachers must take care of
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 health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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