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Some people believe that it is better to share as much as information in scientific research , business and academic worlds but others think that some information are too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the present, sharing
information
 has been easier than ever before. Is it good to share
data
 free of cost? Some people agree to it and they want to distribute
information
 via research papers or blogs or through various different sources with both cooperate world and academic world. But some people don't want the
data
 to be free.In
this
 essay, I will discuss both viewpoints and provide my opinion. Freely available
information
 will be helpful for students. Students do not have a lot of money to spend on expensive materials.
For Instance
, if they can access more facts via research papers or other academic magazines or blogs, they can educate themselves easily and free of charge. It will assist them to gain more knowledge. In short, students will be benefited from zero cost
data
.
However
, some believe that
information
 is money. Even though it's hard to accept, companies pay money to gather
data
 to get a competitive advantage in the market.
For example
, many technology companies buy
information
 about the latest shopping trends across the world from tech giants
such
 as Facebook or Google. They believe these insights are too valuable to share publicly.
Finally
, many businesses get the advantage of
data
that is
 not free. In conclusion, I discussed
information
 distribution.
Although
 it's a controversial topic, I think
information
 should be pricey.
Moreover
, people don't understand the worthiness if they get something for free. If they pay a price, they will make good use of that
data
.
Hence
 I think,
data
 should have a price.
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