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Write about the following topic: Some people argue that fashion items cost too much money. Others say that this is acceptable because fashion is an important part of life. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion

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Throughout history,
fashion
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 was one of the key aspects of a certain group. Before cloth wear was established to cover up certain parts of the
Body
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. But after a time it was used to identify traditions. The best example of
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 is that people in colder regions would wear thick layers of fur and animal
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, whereas in hotter areas mostly
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 things were worn and they were made by the resources nature had available for them. My Opinion about
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 topic is that nowadays
fashion
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 has a lot of varieties regarding quality and branding, which to an extent debatable if it’s worth the price. I can understand that people want to lower the prices in shops. But what they have to understand is that certain items have a detailed production with a
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 quality. These are things that create the price. What I have realized recently is that to be fashionable you don’t need to be spending a lot of money. You can make very good combinations with basic clothes which is
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 the trend nowadays of oversized, basic cloth. Most of the people that wear designer clothes don’t really pay attention to their
fashion
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 sense. They mostly wear these specific clothes to make themselves comfortable and to be noticed which is completely unnecessary in my opinion. Personally, I think the question depends on how important
fashion
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 is to you. If
fashion
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 isn’t a big aspect
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 I don't think prices of clothing should be something you should worry about. Nowadays there are a lot of shops around and they all have a different
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 you just have to find what is most suitable for you.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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