Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspaper and TV has bad influences, so this kind of infornation should be restricted on the media. To what extend do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words

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that the detailed criminal description in newspapers and the TV has bad influences and it is should be restricted on the
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think they should
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because it will bring bad influences
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children in
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following paragraph Nowadays people can easily find
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of violence on television and
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going on around the globe, and the mass
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are publishing every detail of an incident, especially a violent one.as we can see,violent
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can lead to bad influence on young children causing them to have misconceptions that can lead to future crimes.
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immature
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without parental supervision is more susceptible to violence.So, learning from the exact crime description
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can lead to him exceeding the exact same action.
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,A detailed report of a crime scene given out in the
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can provide potential criminals with useful information
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difficult to obtain.
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can help them become more aware of police shortcomings and pitfalls, and make them harder to track.
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, the detailed identification of crimes has helped offenders to commit crimes skillfully and undetected.
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in some cases can alert viewers to the dangers in the neighbour which help them avoid danger to their family From what has been discussed above, it can be easily said that the press contributes a rather negative impact on society.
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, I feel that there should be restrictions on what the
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media
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can or cannot do in reporting a crime scene.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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