Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspaper and TV has bad influences, so this kind of infornation should be restricted on the media. To what extend do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words

In recent days, one of the mainstream media's strategies to grab the audience's attention has been the use of detailed
crime
reports. It has been suggested that
such
information
should be strictly controlled, if not outright banned. In my opinion, I totally agree with
this
. There are two reasons for my opinion. At
first
, it is undeniable that these messages disproportionately affect children who lack
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knowledge
and awareness. Today, thanks to the development of
information
technology, children have easy access to
information
. Due to their vulnerable state of mind and inexperience, they can not protect themselves from
this
bad
information
and are able to stimulate it. Seriously, if kids read or watch
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many detailed
crime
reports, it seems like normal
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that they can use to solve future problems.
Second
, equally important, profiling
criminals
in too
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details
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is like teaching potential
criminals
how to handle similar cases in the future.
Although
the original purpose of
crime
is to warn people about it and teach them how to protect themselves,
crime
can learn from it. You can learn not only how the police investigate, but
also
how other people commit crimes. New research shows that most
criminals
learn their
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skills from TV shows and newspaper
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about crimes, even political detectives. To sum up, violence in the media, including the detailed portrayal of
criminals
, has a negative impact on society. Legislation should be public, strictly controlled if not prohibited, and minimize the negative impact of
such
information
.
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